Saturday, May 4, 2013

Yun Jeong Lee/Persuasive essay/Tue 3,4

Is downloading copyrighted materials from the Internet a crime?

 

 

201002551 E.I.T

Yun Jeong Lee

 

             As more and more people around the world are getting access to the Internet, Internet-related crime rates are also escalating. Especially in Korea, downloading copyrighted materials from the Internet has become a serious problem. It is reported that approximately 83% of the Korean population have access to high-speed Internet. Such easy access has facilitated illegal downloads of copyrighted materials. However, it is a crime to download such materials without paying a just price for their use.

             First of all, copyrighted materials are usually directly or indirectly related to financial profits. For example, music and movies-typical copyrighted materials-are usually made for profit in the first place. Singers and musicians record their music and gain profit from selling CDs and getting paid for the use of their music. Movie makers also seek profit through selling their movies to theaters or on DVDs. However, if their works are available on the Internet for free or unjustly cheap price, it would be unfair because the movie makers and musicians will earn that much less money. In other words, one man sows and another man reaps.

             Moreover, illegal downloads of copyrighted materials can discourage people who produce those materials. For example, if music files were so easily downloadable from the Internet, musicians would feel discouraged because they would feel that their music is 'stolen' and 'distributed' for a cheap price. Their earning would decrease and their music would lose value. Movie makers would also feel the same. Easy and cheap distribution of their works might make their movies less valuable. Thus, they might be discouraged from making any more movies.

             Some people argue that downloading materials from the Internet is not a crime because they are only sharing materials for nonprofit purposes. However, this is unreasonable because materials shared online spread very fast and may have unintended consequences. For example, one might share a copyrighted material with five friends. One might think that just five people have downloaded the material, but those five friends may share it with five of their friends, causing a snowball effect and making a network of downloaders. Such sharing might continue, and the material might become so widespread that it influences the copyrighter.

             Copyrighted materials must be protected by law. Internet downloads may affect copyrighters' profits and also discourage them by lowering values of their work. Therefore, illegal and indiscriminate downloads of such materials from the Internet is a crime and violation of law. Stricter regulations should be set up to control illegal downloads and to protect copyrighters' rights.

2 comments:

  1. making the readers to be more familiar about the content of the essay. Also your essay gives some statistics related to topic, making your essay look more logical.

    2. Your main point seems that illegal downloading is a crime considering economic and cultural loss.

    3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
    -crime: This word struck me that it shows that illegal downloading is absolutely breaking laws. I think the word depicts the negative side strongly

    4. Some things aren't clear to me. These particular words or lines could be improved.
    -Internet downloads may affect copyrighters' profits and also discourage them by lowering values of their work.
    : In conclusion it is little bit ambiguous what exactly is Internet downloads because internet downloads can be both legal and illegal. So it would be clearer if you separate internet downloads and illegal downloads clearly.

    5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement.
    It would be more convincing if you give where the source came from. It is important to give numerical figure to show the readers what is happening but the source might also be important to make sure the readers that additional information is reliable. So the essay would be more persuasive and argumentative if you quote the exact source of the statistics.

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  2. To Yun Jeong Lee From Saewhan Park

    1. What I like about this piece of writing is that your essay is well organized and easy to follow your logic.

    2. Your main point seems to protect copyrights since it may affect copyrighters' profits and encourage them to create arts more.

    3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:

    "Some people aregue that~"

    I thought it really powerful because it makes your essay well-balanced with not only your opinions but also others' which makes it more persuasive.

    4. Some things aren't clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved:

    None

    5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is that you could put other supporting ideas to the paragraph where you introduce your opposite points of view.

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