Intellectual property rights (IPRs) are regulations that were formed to protect the rights of 'Idea Owners'. If someone creates a product or any kind of written or authorized content, those outputs are qualified to be protected by intellectual property rights. If the outputs are copied, duplicated, or utilized without the consent of the owner, this action is infringing IPRs. As the society takes more steps into the complete digital era, the protection of intellectual property should be more guaranteed than ever. IPRs will promote further developments in the intellectual property industry, encourage consumer ethics, and reduce the possible dangers of illegally using copyrighted products.
First of all, IPRs will be able to motivate the creators to excel in their fields. It will discourage them greatly if they are not able to recoup the money they have invested in the development and are not funded for further research or production. On the other hand, if IPRs are strongly imposed, the creators will have the incentive to continue on with their research and eventually bring forward rapid development in many fields. For example, Korean movie industry is known to be in a depression due to the growing movie downloading websites. If IPRs are fully protected, the movie industry will be able to gain profit and thus provide the moviegoers with better and brand new movies.
Secondly, protecting IPRs will lead to more ethical consumption. The reason why the illegal downloading business is thriving in most countries is partly attributed to the lack of protection of IPRS. Some people might say that there are still some people who were tracked down by the cyber police for illegal downloading. However, those are very rare and few cases when an illegal downloader was arrested or fined. If IPRs are protected in stricter manner, it will discourage the consumers from choosing illicit downloading websites over legal downloading programs. If this continues, it will be able to promote safer and more ethical consuming patterns of the consumers. Also, the government's effort to raise awareness of the public that illegal downloading is wrong by advertising on TVs and newspapers will be the great first step to ethical consumption.
Lastly, illegally using copyrighted materials may bring about risks and dangers. This means that nobody can be sure if the products that are duplicated are safe to use. When people illegally download music or movies from a website, they usually suffer from numerous viruses that are downloaded along with the file. They also do not know where the file originated, and whether it was made by someone reliable. Another serious example is generic drugs. Generic drugs are a form of medicine that is made with illegally copied formulas which were created by big pharmaceutical companies. These drugs are usually made with inferior ingredients to be sold in third world countries at lower prices. However, despite its cost and necessity, the danger of these drugs has always been controversial as no one knows whether these drugs are truly effective with safe ingredients inside.
In brief, the protection of IPRs must be guaranteed in this globalized and digitalized era. Though it seems very attractive to use other's works without asking for their consent, these actions cannot lead to more developments. Infringing IPRs is same thing as infringing our rights. We should stop and think again before downloading illegally, and ask ourselves if we would be happy if others used my work freely without asking. Probably not.
1. I like that you explained the term IPRs in the beginning of the essay; it hints the readers about what your argumentative essay is going to be about. I also like the fact that you briefly but clearly stated your points in the end of the introductory paragraph. It creates a smooth transition into the body paragraph and the readers know what to expect from your essay. Also, the topic sentences of each supporting body paragraph are so clear that I can understand your whole essay by simply reading the topic sentences of each paragraph.
ReplyDelete2. The main point seems to be that as we enter a complete digital era, intellectual property should be more guaranteed than ever.
3. The term ‘ethical consumption’ and ‘globalized and digitalized era’ are very strong. The former term is very strong in that it actually makes me think about what ‘ethical’ means in terms of consumption. The later expression seems to explain well the era we are living in now, making the essay more persuasive because the question of IPRs seems to be more relevant an issue in the globalized and digitalized era than ever before.
4. I think your arguments are strong and persuasive, and also very clear to the readers. I think it is good as it is.
5. As I mentioned above, I don’t think any changes are necessary. Your essay is very persuasive and well structured. But it might be a good idea to add a counter-argument in the third body paragraph and refute it to make your essay even more persuasive and strong. Well done! :)
-Yun Jeong Lee 201002551
To Minyoung Kang From Se-Kyu Oh Assignment Intellectual Property
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that you supported your topic not only in terms of creators (industries) but also in terms of downloaders (consumers). It became strong support for your topic ,I think
2. Your main point seems to be that intellectual properties should be protected more than ever because it can be good for related industries and also consumers
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
duplicated, or utilized: these simple but good words never occurred to me when I was doing the assignment. I think you have good words knowledge or know how to use high-registered words
4. Some things aren’t clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved (meaning not clear, supporting points missing, order seems mixed up, writing not lively):
Your ‘drug’ example was easy to understand your third supporting paragraph, but I wonder if it was necessary to support your main idea, considering we’re talking about Intellectual properties.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is
Bring an example was a good way to support your main idea but in this case, I think It wasn’t that necessary to mention drugs