Germany is well known for its great quality of beer. Since Germans are much fond of drinking beer, they gather together on a special occasion to celebrate and enjoy drinking beer; Oktoberfest, another word for "beer festival." On that day, not only Germans but also visitors from abroad of all ages join the festival for the enjoyment and excitement. This festival is particularly loved by Germans due to its unique historical background as well as a wide variety of traditional food and the top beers one can enjoy during the festival.
Oktoberfest in Munich which traditionally starts in the third weekend in September, has its root in 1810 when Germans celebrate the wedding of the beloved Frederick Willim I for five days. After that, one of the six major companies of Munich sponsored this special day and they have now today's the largest beer festival in the world. Although this celebration for the king's wedding originally lasted five days, nowadays it is a sixteen-day annual festival with more than six million people from around the world.
During the festival, it is needless to say that one can meet the best quality of beers in Germany. Beer drinkers first gather in a "bear tent" in Munich which can accommodate more than four thousand people. As soon as they have their seats, they will find themselves soon surrounded by not only German top beers, but also the most famous beer makers' best products chosen by the host company. Specially brewed local beers are also introduced for this special occasion.
A wide variety of traditional food is also served for visitors during the festival. The most famous one is Hendi which is a German chicken cuisine. There are also Schweinebraten or roast pork, Schweinshaxe or grilled ham, Steckerlfisch or grilled fish on a stick, and last but not least German sausages along with potato or bread dumplings. Those delicious and decorative traditional cuisines give an extra delightful enjoyment to visitors and match perfectly with the festival beers.
A visit to Germany is incomplete if one doesn't plan to go visit Munich for the beer festival. Even if he/she is not a big fan of beer, Oktoberfest has kept its uniqueness with its historical background which will provide a good opportunity to know Germany better.
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ReplyDelete1. I like the topic of your writing.Oktoberfest is one of my wonderful festivals that I have been to. So, while reading your essay, I could recall the memories about it.
2. Your main point seems that Oktoberfest is loved by all around the world because of its historical background and nice beer.
3. The part struck me as powerful is the 2nd paragraph. I exactly realized where the history of the festival came from through this paragraph. It was so imformative to me.
4. You said 'the top beers one can enjoy during the festival'. If you wrote down the reason why German beer is the best, it would be more supportive.
5. As I mentioned above, it is not clear why you think that German beer is the best. If you add them to your essay, it would make the improvement.
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ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that I found out about Oktoberfest in detail. I knew only slightly about Oktoberfest but your writing gave me lots information.
2. Your main point seems to be that we should visit Oktoberfest which is beloved worldwide.
3. sixteen-day annual festival with more than six million people from around the world: I was actually surprised while reading your writing because this sentence shows how famous Oktoberfest is. Attracted six million people just sixteen-day indicates that this is not an ordinary festival.
4. also visitors from abroad of all ages join the festival for the enjoyment and excitement: I can't agree with the point you've made. I thought alcohol was allowed for people with a certain age or above.
5. I was hoping that you explained more about "bear tent". I can't really imagine a tent which can hold four thousand people without any further explanation.
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ReplyDeleteGermany is well known for its great quality of beer. Since Germans are much fond of drinking beer, they gather together on a special occasion to celebrate and enjoy drinking beer; Oktoberfest, another word for "beer festival." On that day, not only Germans but also visitors from abroad join the festival for the enjoyment and excitement. This festival is particularly loved by Germans due to its unique historical background as well as a wide variety of traditional food and the top beers one can enjoy during the festival.
Oktoberfest in Munich which traditionally starts in the third weekend in September, has its root in 1810 when Germans celebrate the wedding of the beloved Frederick Willim I for five days. After that, one of the six major companies of Munich sponsored this special day and they have now today's the largest beer festival in the world. Although this celebration for the king's wedding originally lasted five days, nowadays it is a sixteen-day annual festival with more than six million people from around the world.
During the festival, it is needless to say that one can meet the best quality of beers in Germany. Beer drinkers first gather in a "bear tent" in Munich which can accommodate more than four thousand people. As soon as they have their seats, they will find themselves soon surrounded by not only German beers, but also the most famous beer makers' best products chosen by the host company. Specially brewed local beers are also introduced for this special occasion.
A wide variety of traditional food is also served for visitors during the festival. The most famous one is Hendi which is a German chicken cuisine. There are also Schweinebraten or roast pork, Schweinshaxe or grilled ham, Steckerlfisch or grilled fish on a stick, and last but not least German sausages along with potato or bread dumplings. Those delicious and decorative traditional cuisines give an extra delightful enjoyment to visitors and match perfectly with the festival beers.
A visit to Germany is incomplete if one doesn't plan to go visit Munich for the beer festival. Even if he/she is not a big fan of beer, Oktoberfest has kept its uniqueness with its historical background which will provide a good opportunity to know Germany better.