Jeongwol Daeboreum : The biggest holiday of the full moon in Korea
200903450 French/EIT
Hyein Jin
Korean holidays are full of colorful traditions. Among them, Jeongwol Daeboreum is well known for its unique custom and festivals hardly seen in other nations. Jeongwol Daeboreum(Daeboreum in short) means the fifteenth day of the lunar calendar and the first full moon of the lunar year. On this day, a huge celebration to drive out misfortunes is accompanied by many traditions.
Jeongwol Daeboreum is a day for celebrating the very first full moon of the year. Because the moon traditionally symbolizes the prosperity, Korean ancestors paid great attention to when the moon waxes and wanes. Thus, the first moon of the year has been subject to a big festival in our culture. The day of Jeongwon Daeboreum also means the commencement of farming in the town. Our ancestor believed that the holy spirit of the full moon would direct us to a good harvest of the year.
Daeboreum is also the day of a special custom and food. First, we open the day of Daeboreum by cracking nuts with our teeth to wish healthier teeth. And then, all family members gather together to drink Guibalgi-sul, a stained rice drink for the day. The word Guibalgi means 'to hear something clearly', and Koreans hope to hear only good things in the year by drinking this wine. In terms of the food, Daeboreum is famous for Yaksik, a sort of rice cake made with glutinous rice chestnuts, pinenuts and honey, and Ogokbab, boiled rice with 5 kinds of grains. We share this food with neighbors around us before the moon comes up.
When the night of the day comes, the big festival of Daeboreum starts. Before the festival, children climb up the mountain to see the full moon as fast as they can, because the first full moon means the good luck to us. This is called 'Dalmaji', which is seeing full moon with friends and family. In the moonlight, we enjoy the most festive time of celebration, 'Jwibullori'. It is a festival of Daeboreum of burning weeds and grass to kill insects on our farming land and wish a great harvest of the year. Besides of the spectacular and huge flames, male adults show dancing with lion masks, 'Sajanori' at the same time. We dance and enjoy the special foods all night long in such a festive mood.
Certainly Jeongwol Daeboreum is the biggest holiday in the year, and the day is filled with unique and rich custom of Korea. However, it is sad that a lot of people in this era do not celebrate this holiday anymore. We should remember this special holiday in order to keep our valuable tradition and enrich our modern lives.
To Hyein Jin From Chae-min Lim
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that Your writing is well following the Five-Paragraph Essay structure. It seems nice. Also each paragraph is supporting your thesis properly.
2. Your main point seems to be that Jeongwol Daeboreum is our unique and traditional holiday but recently people do not value it much.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
(1) Above all, I think that second paragraph describes the process for the day in a very detail way. It says not only food's name but also main ingredients of them. It is very impressive!
4. Some things aren't clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved:
(1) This is called 'Dalmaji', which is seeing full moon with friends and family.
->This sentence looks a little weird grammatically. It is written as if Dalmaji saw full moon by itself. It would be better if you edit it more clearly.
5. The one change you could make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is to be careful to make a statement. In the conclusion, you wrote "However, it is sad that a lot of people in this era do not celebrate this holiday anymore". This looks like there is no person who celebrates the holiday, but there are still people who enjoy the day. Anyway, before mentioning kind of facts, it would be better for you to think twice.^^;
Thank you.
To Hyein Jin from Jisu Song 201001709
ReplyDelete1. What I like from your writing is that you used many traditional Korean terms using ‘’ and that you explained them well in English.
2. Your main point seems to be that Jeongwol Daeboreum is the biggest holiday of full moon and that Koreans should keep celebrating this tradition.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful :
*words or lines :
However, it is sad that a lot of people in this era do not celebrate this holiday anymore. We should remember this special holiday in order to keep our valuable tradition and enrich our modern lives.
I chose this line powerful because while I was reading your essay, I discovered that I barely know about Jeongwol Daeboreum. Much information was new to me and I felt kind of guilty.
4. Some things aren't clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved
In the last paragraph, you wrote “a lot of people in this era do not celebrate this holiday anymore”. But I think ‘people in this era’ is a too big word in this essay. Maybe you can use ‘people these days’.
5. The one change you could make would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is :
I think you have to include some parts of process organized in a logical sequence. You could write about the process of making Yaksik in your 2nd body paragraph. You used ‘first’ and ‘then’ in that paragraph, but I don’t think it shows a process.
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ReplyDelete1) I carefully read two comments and reflect them to my writing.
2) I changed some words more appropriately, and corrected some tiny grammatical errors.
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Jeongwol Daeboreum : The biggest holiday of the full moon in Korea
200903450 French/EIT
Hyein Jin
Korean holidays are full of colorful traditions. Among them, Jeongwol Daeboreum is well known for its unique custom and festivals hardly seen in other nations. Jeongwol Daeboreum(Daeboreum in short) means the fifteenth day of the lunar calendar and the first full moon of the lunar year. On this day, a huge celebration to drive out misfortunes is accompanied by many traditions.
Jeongwol Daeboreum is a day for celebrating the very first full moon of the year. Because the moon traditionally symbolizes the prosperity, Korean ancestors paid great attention to when the moon waxes and wanes. Thus, the first moon of the year has been subject to a big festival in our culture. The day of Jeongwon Daeboreum also means the commencement of farming in the town. Our ancestor believed that the holy spirit of the full moon would direct us to a good harvest of the year.
Daeboreum is also the day of a special custom and food. We open the day of Daeboreum by cracking nuts with our teeth to wish healthier teeth. And then, all family members gather together to drink Guibalgi-sul, a stained rice drink for the day. The word Guibalgi means ‘to hear something clearly’, and Koreans hope to hear only good things in the year by drinking this wine. In terms of the food, Daeboreum is famous for Yaksik, a sort of rice cake made with glutinous rice chestnuts, pinenuts and honey, and Ogokbab, boiled rice with 5 kinds of grains. We share this food with neighbors around us until the moon comes up.
When the night arrives, big festivals of Daeboreum start. First, right before the festival, children climb up the mountain to see the full moon as clear as possible, because the first full moon means the good luck to us. This is called ‘Dalmaji’, which means watching full moon with friends and family. Second, we start to enjoy the most festive time of celebration, ‘Jwibullori’. It is a practice of Daeboreum of burning weeds and grass to kill insects on our farming land and wish a great harvest of the year. Third, besides of the spectacular and huge flames, male adults show dancing with lion masks, ‘Sajanori’. We dance and enjoy the special foods all night long in such a festive mood.
Certainly Jeongwol Daeboreum is the biggest holiday in the year, and the day is filled with unique and rich custom of Korea. However, it is sad that a lot of modern people do not celebrate this holiday anymore. Some of Korean remember and celebrate it, but this day is almost forgotten and treated as a normal weekday. We should remember this special holiday in order to keep our valuable tradition and enrich our modern lives.
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