Looking at photographs, we usually get emotions from them at a glance and decide they have this feeling and that feeling without looking again. However, if you look at them more carefully, you can have fun guessing their own stories or feeling other things that you might have missed. Here are two photographs of children, which have completely different emotions and stories.
The first photograph is called "Village School" by Margaret Bourke-White published in 1934. As you can guess, this one is about students in village school. The first impression would be gloomy or dark, but looking at it closely, I found that only the children's faces were highlighted to emphasize their facial expressions. It seemed to me that they were waiting for something they didn't like, probably some boring subject or very strict teacher. Also, it shows stillness.
The other photograph is called "Children's Puppet Theatre, Paris 1963" by Alfred Eisenstadt. The children are watching some puppet play and getting excited. The main focus of the photograph is apparently a boy who is pointing something and whose mouth is wide open. Or, you can say it's five children at the front line. A boy at the very left is covering his ears maybe because children next to him are screaming too loudly. And, two girls who are leaning against each other are probably too surprised or scared. This photograph shows very lively mood.
In both photographs, the facial expressions of children are well highlighted even though the two have totally different moods. The first one shows stillness and unwillingness while the other one has liveliness and excitement. The former emphasizes the light in the darkness while the latter focuses on vividness. However, there's something in common between them. It's that the children don't hide their genuine emotions. When they don't like something, they express it. When they are excited or frightened, they show it, too.
The two photographs have completely different moods. In "Village School", we feel unwillingnss and stillness of the boys. And, in "Children's Puppet Theatre", we get excitement and liveliness of the children. But, we can also see the similarity between the two. The both photographs stress how the children of each photograph are really feeling.
To Young-jun Yoo From Minyoung Kang
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that for each photo, you imagined a scene that these pictures were taken in. For example, you wrote ‘strict teacher’ for the first body paragraph, and in the second photo you mentioned ‘boy covering his years.’
2. Your main point seems that there are different emotions and stories that are conveyed by the two pictures.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
1) Stillness and unwillingness: These two words wrap up the emotions from the pictures well.
2) Children don’t hide their emotions: I never thought of it this way, but I think it is interesting that the similarity between these two photos can be that they are revealing their emotions. I thought in the first photo, they are not showing their emotions.
4. Some things aren't clear to me.
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5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is that it would be better if you added brief descriptions about the photos you will discuss in the intro paragraph, so the readers know what to expect in the body paragraphs.
To Yoo Young-jun From Park Sae-whan
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that you used many descriptive adjectives to describe pictures.
2. Your main point seems to be that the two photos have different emotions and stories.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
"The first one shows stillness and unwillingness while the other one has liveliness and excitement."
I thought this sentence was strong because you described two different pictures' moods by arranging two opposite sides of nouns, like unwillingness and liveliness.
4. Some things aren't clear to me.
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5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is to add descriptions about the setting of each photo so that readers who didn't look at the photo have ideas what the setting is.