In Modern arts, it's not important on how alike painting is drawn. It should contain a certain message. That is to say, there must be more than meets the eye. Photo is the same as painting. To take a good picture, photographers always keep focusing on leaving a message through their photo. And, as an observer, we should apprehend what message they want to deliver. Of course, message itself might be different depending on individuals.
In the first picture, this is called "Village School" by Margaret Bourke-White. As you can guess from the title, the spatial background is a village school. Though the picture is a black-and-white, the mood is somewhat dark. If the picture can be developed into a color photo, its own dark mood may not easily disappear. Also, it's not easy to find a smile from the children. Someone frowns his face or woodenly expressionless. When it comes to how they sit on chairs, they sit up straight without losing the posture.
In Alfred Eisentadt's picture, Children's Puppet Theatre, Children seem to enjoy a performance outdoors. Their looks are all funny. Especially, many children make a surprise look. It's likely that they are surprised to see something amazing, not to see a horrible one. And, the mood itself is active and bright in general. Though it's also a black-and-white like the first photo, the scale of white is much higher than that of black. They sit on designated seats, pose is very various. The boy in the center of the photo stands up with reaching his arm front, and someone stands agape with their eyes open. It's too various to be described one by one.
In those two pictures, there are some characteristics in comparison with each other. On the background, one is in the dark indoors and the other is in the bright outdoors. They all have same subjects-children; we can feel some dignity from the first one, and innocence from the second one. Also, one is standardized, and the other looks free.
We don't know which one is better artistically and we can't. Just as art can't be objectively estimated, so the photo is the same. One thing is for sure. A good photo is supposed to have a message. Through a photo, photographer and viewer, they can share each other's feeling. But, if there is no any medium to share them, it's meaningless.
To Park Shin-yong From Park Sae-whan
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that you used many descriptive words correctly.
2. Your main point seems to be though there are some differences in two photos, and that it is important to catch out different massages.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
"we should apprehend what message they want to deliver."
I thought it powerful because I totally agree with you. Each photo delivers some messages and we should understand the meaning of it.
4. Some things arent clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved
"We don't know which one is better artistically and we can't."
I think the tone of this sentence might sound too strong and definite.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is to summarize better in your conclusion. It needs to paraphrase the whole ideas using different words.
1. What I like about this piece of writing is your introduction. At first I thought it was weird starting about modern art, not photograph, but
ReplyDeleteI then realize it is something to do with the thesis. It drag my attention quite well.
2. Your main point seems to be that even though photographs deal with same subject, the message they contain can differ.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
-Though it's also a black-and-white like the first photo, the scale of white is much higher than that of black.
: It was interesting that you mention the black and white photo as a common thing and then mention about the difference in them. It was easier for me to notice the difference because of the contrast.
4. Some things aren’t clear to me.
-Also, one is standardized, and the other looks free.
: Although it could be infer looking at the photos, it would be more clear if you mention which one is referring to what.
-Just as art can't be objectively estimated, so the photo is the same
: The meaning is little bit unclear to me it sounds like that photograph can have one objective emotion...? May be it would be better if you make it more clear
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is
The third body paragraph,the comparison part, is little bit shorter than other paragraph. It would be better if you give some more detailed description of photographs.