A single pose and a single expression on one's face tell more than a long paragraph of details about one's feeling. This is why even a single photograph can be loved and appreciated passing the generations. Both photographs, "Village School" by Margaret Bourke-White, "Children's Puppet Theatre, Paris 1963" by Alfred Eisenstadt have their own unique stories, created from different effects.
In "Village School" the overall atmosphere is calm, organized and a little bit tensioned. The room where the boys sit straight is dark. The photograph lacks lights. Everything except the boys face is not much exposed. Therefore, the viewer's focus is easily attracted to the boy's face. The viewers can see every face of the boys quite clearly. The each face of boys does not vary and most of them wear similar clothes which is dark. Also, all of them sit upright with their chests heading forward. It gives the viewer a feeling of the sameness. Although some of them are watching the photographer, and the other of them is watching something or someone that the viewer's cannot know, it does not disturb the overall sameness.
In "Children's Puppet Theatre" the viewers can feel the dynamic mood. Each child in the photograph has all different expressions on their faces and takes different actions. Emotions that the viewers can catch from the face of each child are various. The viewers witness the feelings of the scared, the surprised, the exited and the curious. Children in the photograph all stands randomly, put on different clothes and have different hair styles. It gives the viewer a more dynamic and interesting impression. The five main faces in front of the photograph is the main interest of the photograph. The further from them is the more blurred, giving the obvious indication that those five faces are where the photographer expected the viewers to see first.
Both photographs have children as their main objects. However, they cannot be more different. Two of them vary in many aspects. Among them, what contrasts most is that the "Village School" gives the feeling of sameness meanwhile the "Children's Puppet Theatre" gives the dynamic feeling. Both groups of children draw people's attention with different attracting properties.
To An youmi From Eun Hye Jang
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is the way you understand the first photograph. I did not think the atmosphere of "Village School" is clam.
2. Your manin point seems to be that a single pose and a single expression on one's face can show more than long explaination of one's feeling
3. These particular words of lines struck me as powerful:
This is why even a single photograph can be loved and appreciated passing the generations.
This sentence reminded me of the awesome feeling that I had when I had watched old pictures.
4. Some things are not clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved:
Everything except the boys face is not much exposed. Therefore, the viewer's focus is easily attracted to the boy's face.
You seemed to be in a hurry.
the boys- the boys' and the boy's face- the boys's face
5.The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvemnet in this piece of writing is
I don't see your coulusion paragraph. And you'd better add some sentences into background information in introduction.
To An youmi From Youngjun Yoo
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is the way you wrote in the introduction paragraph. It's concise and impressive that seeing an expression on the face is way better than a lot of words.
2. Your manin point seems to be that the two photographs have their own unique stories made from different effects.
3. These particular words of lines struck me as powerful:
A single pose and a single expression on one's face tell more than a long paragraph of details about one's feeling.
: When I read this sentence, I realized that it indeed true. I like it. This is the power of photograph.
4. Some things are not clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved:
1)Everything except the boys face is not much exposed.
: I can see what you mean by this. I think it would be clearer if you changed it to "Nothing except the boys' faces is much exposed."
2)main faces in front of - : in the foreground of -
5.The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvemnet in this piece of writing is to add the third body paragraph. It could be about the similarity or comparison between the two photographs. Also, it would be better if you paid more attention to the grammar mistakes.