Photographs make it easy for everyone to remember images of memories. The memories do not necessarily have to be happy ones, and sometimes they reveal bitter truth that keeps dark sides along with it. "Village School" and "Children's Puppet Theatre, Paris 1963" are two photographs taken by Margaret Bourke-White and Alfred Eisenstadt. They are both depicting children, but have different moods and feeling.
In the first photograph, "Village School," several school boys are sitting in the dark class room, where lights can hardly be found. Those boys look quite nervous or scared by something and nobody in the class room laughs or even smiles. The picture also gives a feeling that these boys are very disciplined by authority, and have no room for freedom. A boy who is sitting closest to a camera seems to reveal grief through his big, pale eyes, which makes the overall depressing atmosphere more visible.
In contrast, the second photograph, "Children's Puppet Theatre, Paris 1963," easily makes anyone who looks at this photo smile. The reason is that the overall color of the picture is very bright, contradicting the dark images shown in the first photograph, and children in the picture all seem to be very exciting about something. The boy and a girl in the center seem very fascinated and amused, while some girls are covering their mouth with excitement and boy ears with his eyes wide open. Such images give extra color and animation to the entire picture.
Although both photographs also have a similarity in that both are targeting children, the contrast is so obvious that it obscures the similarity. The first picture only has dark-faced male kids, while the second one has cheerful boys and girls looking happy. In the former, kids are looking at the same place, while the latter, kids look at all various angles which give it more lively images.
In conclusion, in the same black and white pictures with the same targets, children are depicted differently, one with sadness and another with joy. These different emotions look more visible with less or more lights in the pictures. Therefore, the first one makes viewers feel depressed, while the second one cheerful and lively.
To Park Sae-whan From Youngjun Yoo
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is the organization of the essay. The introduction is concise and clear, and the body part is well divided.
2. Your manin point seems to be that the two photographs have different moods and feeling enough to obscure the similarity that both depict children.
3. These particular words of lines struck me as powerful:
1)gives a feeling that these boys are very disciplined by authority, and have no room for freedom.
: I think this describes the first photograph well.
2)the contrast is so obvious that it obscures the similarity
: Yes, I could've not thought of the similarity without deeper thinking.
4. Some things are not clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved:
none
5.The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvemnet in this piece of writing is to strengthen the conclusion paragraph. And, it would be better if you added something to the third body paragraph like the similarity between the two.